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Now, for the very first part of the video, it feels a bit too far drawn out, it’s understandable, wanting to have a hook to see what goes on later in the video, but by having that you already reveal what the game is like, therefore the audience looses a bit of interest. The climatic footage of the building with commentary was already enough to gain my attention and want to see what happens next.



Although the moment at 2:10 is meant to be a bit more goofy and lighthearted, the music feels a bit out of place, and continues for a bit too long, and with a sudden cut makes it awkward (the same thing happens in later parts of the video). Once you set the tone, keep the tone, although the changes in energy were nice, the sudden meme sound effects were jarring made it sound forced, overshadowing your funny moments. Your reactions were what made me laugh, not the sounds.

Your commentary was nice, but it felt a little too centered around the game, mostly talking about the vast majority of enemies, talk about what makes you dislike the enemies, do they do anything special? What specifically don’t you like about them? Don’t making it complaining, make it analyzing. Don’t be afraid to branch off of the game as well! Feel free to follow the train of thought that goes through your mind as you play the game. What does this remind you of? What does that remind you of? It adds a layer of authenticity to it.

For the outro, it felt a bit too sudden, try to overcome a task (like the cave of spiders) completely, leaving a satisfying ending for the viewer. They’ll feel more rewarded, and want to watch more of your videos.
If you want to try and play it off as a “to-be-continued” style ending, cut it off at the peak of stress, a moment where you yourself aren’ certain what will happen next. The spider room was a good moment, I feel like you choice the wrong moment. Now that we know what the threat is, we aren’t as curious, bringing it back full circle to the intro.
For the intro we didn’t know what was happening, but knew the threat. And for the end we knew what was happening, and knew the threat. Try to keep it one or the other, and by swapping the scenarios it adds a nice contrast from beginning to end. I know that this kind of stuff is difficult to do unscripted, but try and find those good moments in between gameplay.

Overall a nice video dude! Good luck for future videos, and I hope this helps!

Firstly, you're doing a specialty map; anyone unfamiliar with the franchise id likely to be lost (assuming they don't bail as soon as this is evident).
[If these are the videos you want to make, that's fine… but you will be limiting yourself to a smaller audience.]
While the 'life choices' crack is assumed to be intended as humor, broader indications of this in your voice would be a good idea…

☝ these points are [largely] specific to the genre video you seem to make and may be ignored if you write me off as not your target demographic [which appears to be very much the case].

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☟ these points are generic to MC videos. While they may also be somewhat idiosyncratic [and I expect I am far from alone in holding such opinions], they would apply to any MC video.


Much of the video is too dark to see clearly what is happening. This may be consistent with the mood of the map, but makes watching a chore.

There are also far too many jump cuts, to the point where I have no sense of continuity of your movement through the environment.

Swears are not censored (at least not all of them) case in point ~3m40-3m45.
Not an issue for me, but may well be for others (and i can certainly see blocking the channel for youngsters).

Censoring swear words would allow a broader audience like 10+ rather than 13+ and people who dislike swearing (like me.) Your videos are fantastic though and while the content is gory I think gore is better than swearing (WHAT IS WRONG WITH ME??)

Ok I watched the video, here is what I think you could improve:

-Talk louder, you sound like you are in trying instead of being confident y'know ?

-You edit too much, if you want your viewers to enjoy the map you have to enjoy It too. No need for editing every moment.

-Talk about you, or for anything ,other than focusing your words on the map all the time, to make It easier for us to engage with your content, you have to sound like you are playing and we are friends at your house watching you playing.

-Make the introduction no more than 10 seconds, but becareful on the introduction. The first 10 seconds are the most imporotant part of your video.

-In your thumbnails, you could use a little more vibrant colors, because your current format makes your videos to drown at the sea of content, make them stand outl

-Lastly, I would suggest you to study your competition, specifically the successful youtubers that are doing what you do or trying to do.

Best wishes!

I think the intro should be a bit shorter, viewers tend to prefer 30 seconds of a intro rather than a minute long one.



other than that I think your video is very enjoyable. :D

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I know, just do epic challenges and do s***ty cringe kids content like Cocomelon and Babybus