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A Life Of Steve

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predaking_rulez's Avatar predaking_rulez
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One day Steve was walking through a dence forest with hs friends, not too far away from his city. They talked about what they learned in school. Then all of a sudden he was lost from his friends! He was scared! He never been alone. Then all of a sudden he heard a lot of loud booms! The noise almost hurt his ears. He ran to the city, but all he saw was destruction and flames. He decided to run to his house. As he was running, he saw something shiny in his house. When he got to the shiny thing, it turned out it was a round door. This was not just any door, it had a foreign language writen on it. He took out his language  book from school before it was destroyed. He read the words aloud, "You have found your way to freedom, now you must survive Minecraftia!" The door opened as he said the words. He didn't know if he should go through. Then he remembered what his teacher told him, "If you have courage, bravery, and curosity, go for it, but if not don't go for it." Since he had all of those things, he went through. He saw wild horses running through a lucious forest. He saw cows and sheep grazing the long fields. Then in the distance, he saw something that looked like him. As he got closer, it looked like it needed a hug. Then he saw it was a zombie! He yelled, "Dad, help me!" Then he remembered that he was gone just like everyone was. He climbed up a tall tree. He was scared and terrified. Then he felt something in his back pocket. He reached for it and saw it was a bone from his last meal. Then a wolf spawned and it looked hungry, so Steve gave it the bone. Then it turned into Steve's very own dog. Then he realized that he must survive in this crazy world, with animal friends to help him. That is Steve's life before he was alone. The end, or is it?

(This is Steve's future, don't tell him) Steve walked through a dungeon filled with monsters. Luckily he brough his cat, dog, and iron golems with him. His cat scared away all the creepers, his iron golem destroyed all the monsters, and his dog watched out for him. When he got to the end of the dungeon. He used his lead to tie his animals up to fence posts. He saw an ender portal, then he walked through it, because of what he was told a long time ago. This portal was no ender portal when he walked through it. He was given the power to fly in this some how familiar world. He saw that this was his city before it got destroyed. Then he saw a creeper come out of his parents secret door they were hiding. Not just one creeper, a lot of creepers came out. He watched them as they destroyed every citizen and every building. Then he saw him and his friends walking in the forest. Then he saw how he was lost from his friends. But most importantly he saw that his friends were still alive! He was happy. But he couldn't go to that world because he already was in Minecraftia. He was glad and everything was lifted off his back. Then he went back to Minecraftia and hugged his dog, cat, and iron golems, as he said, "My friends are still alive!"
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Helipline
10/09/2014 5:53 pm
Level 8 : Apprentice Engineer
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This is better than others but it is still not there. A good idea would be to add more detail. Also avoid frases like this one that you had,"He saw wild horses running through the wild." You don't need to put wild twice, it sounds weird that way.
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predaking_rulez
10/10/2014 7:42 am
Level 8 : Apprentice Warrior
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There I fixed it. Is it better or is it missing something?
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Helipline
10/20/2014 9:58 pm
Level 8 : Apprentice Engineer
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Good that you fixed it. I havent had time to re read it but you will be fine probably.
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predaking_rulez
10/10/2014 7:31 am
Level 8 : Apprentice Warrior
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Thanks, I thought I put, "He saw wild horses running through a lucious forest." I will add more detail.
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predaking_rulez
10/09/2014 10:03 am
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Please comment, favorite, subscribe, and diamond. please tell me how I did.
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predaking_rulez
10/09/2014 9:39 am
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Hope you enjoyed! I made this blog/contest entry while listening to the song Come With Me Now by KONGOS.
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