Paper Souls

Published Feb 4th, 2021, 2/4/21 10:05 am

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CaraRose
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Hi loves! It is nice to see you here.

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I would love to entry the Love Poetry Contest with a poetry which became a song eventually

Don't worry I know music and pictures
are not important in this contest :)
However, I still see this as a great opportunity to share demo version of the song I'm planning to release in new album
♡ ♡ ♡

_I wrote this song a while ago for a man I cared about so much._
______Unfortunately, he decided to leave me heartbroken...______
__But now I know, God sent him into my life just for this song.___

Text version, if you need

[Paper Souls]

Let a story begin when you were born
Let the most hard pain you hold be a paper cut
You're wandering around in this world
You're chasing a dream that is not your own
Do you have a hope? Will you have home?

When did your soft heart become unbreaking stone?
Let me hold your hand and walk through a heavy storm
You're chasing your dream on your own
You don't let me in but I do have hope
For you and for me and for our...
For our paper souls

You can listen to the song here: https://youtu.be/gsuVqirMEBU

The cover is my painting, I took this photo under the sunlight from my window

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Made with love

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Heavenly Craft PE

• 03/08/2021 4:30 am

• Level 41 : Master Kitten

It's a soothing song. Takes me somewhere calm...

CaraRose

• 03/08/2021 12:52 pm

• Level 66 : High Grandmaster Princess

thank you ♡

Punkamoar

• 02/27/2021 12:18 pm

• Level 55 : Grandmaster Musician

...wow, that's good stuff

CaraRose

• 02/27/2021 1:12 pm

• Level 66 : High Grandmaster Princess

Thank you! ♡

Hardcrafter

• 02/06/2021 6:02 am

• Level 43 : Master Wolf

Much like your song-writing for the windswept album, this is very mature. I love this since there's a huge separation between the raw emotion on display here compared to some people just writing poems about their toasters or some other relatively unimportant things for this contest.

I genuinely hope this poem gets top 3!

I know the song is still a demo, but I feel like I should share that your voice gets drowned out by the instrumental. In my opinion at least, the vocals don't come out as clear as they could be.

CaraRose

• 02/06/2021 6:37 am

• Level 66 : High Grandmaster Princess

thank you so much for your opinion! I appreciate it ♡

You think I should make it louder? And where exactly? :)

Hardcrafter

• 02/06/2021 7:34 am

• Level 43 : Master Wolf

I'd say the piano should be a bit further in the background, right now I feel it's overpowering the rest of the elements in the mix.

Honestly, the vocals seem a bit too quiet throughout the entire song. I know I personally had to listen really closely to catch what was being sung.

CaraRose

• 02/06/2021 8:48 am

• Level 66 : High Grandmaster Princess

alright, thanks for advice ^^

Hardcrafter

• 02/06/2021 10:52 am

• Level 43 : Master Wolf

history

Of course, it is your song so as long as you think it sounds good in your own ears that's the main thing.

Besides, I'm only an amateur myself when it comes to music production and mixing.

Overlord_Aqua_2

• 02/05/2021 6:25 am

• Level 58 : Grandmaster Guard